Law personal statement (8)

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Final personal statement

5th October 2020

Human beings have great potential, but they lack knowledge of the same. One might be an expert in a specific field, but still, be unaware of the fact that growth is limitless. The cause of this is unawareness. People are aware of the existence of their fundamental rights but ironically oblivious when their rights get trampled by superior forces. My endeavour in this regard is to equip myself with the sound knowledge of legal jurisprudence in order to approach wrongs with the law as my weapon. I am xxxxxxx, an ambitious aspirant in the field of law. I desire to uplift society by simplifying the understanding of basic rights and its proper utilization and for all and sundry. In order to achieve my dream, I desire to pursue the course of Law from an esteemed university. My father is an honoured lawyer, and so are my uncles. In fact, I come from a family of seasoned professionals, whose legal contribution to society is exemplary. Though I have always been fascinated with my father’s profession, I was yet unsure of my future aspirations. One day, I picked up a book i.e. ‘Landmark Judgements of India,’ from my father’s study and then I knew my calling in life. It was over the pages of this book that my perception of the legal system was transformed. I was so moved that I concluded upon becoming a lawyer.

Through the completion of my intended graduation course at the university, I want to further develop skills like leadership qualities, teamwork, commercial awareness and creative problem-solving. In the process of it, my communication skills will be further honed. I, over the years, have developed the ability of negotiation, persuasion, and debating through my active participation in co-curricular activities in the school. The reason why I have chosen the United Kingdom for my further studies is that it is the birthplace of codified jurisprudence and political constitution that set the tone for modern democracies to emulate. Also, the innovative manner of teaching is English universities is something that I am fascinated with. Additionally, the pattern of working followed by my current school has been inspired by the study culture of the UK, which I highly appreciate.

At present, I am a student of Grade XII of the oldest boys boarding school of Asia i.e. Bishop Cotton School, Shimla. I have Economics, Political Science, History, and Environmental Science as my core subjects. These I have chosen keeping in mind the study of law. My sharp memory has been an asset to me and my creative thinking has made me a curious individual, who doesn’t settle easily. Beside my academics, I have been active in various extracurricular and co-curricular activities. I have represented my school in a state-level shooting competition and have been a winner at a zonal level table tennis competition. Apart from this, I have been an avid debater, regularly taking part in English elocution, quizzes and dramas; these embedded me with the basic discipline and teamwork, and social skills. I am an empathetic person and I am involved in various social services like teaching underprivileged children in an NGO (Manavta Foundation). I additionally availed the parents who came for adoption with their licit work, other than that I have even worked for Muktisar Welfare Club to provide ration supplies to people amidst this COVID pandemic phase, being brought up in a typical Indian family we are always edified to be a giver and to keep aside our selfish deportment. As an ethical and hardworking student, and I strive to make the best personal and professional version of me shine. For the pursuit of my happiness in conjunction with doing good for society, I want to seek admission to your prestigious university. I aspire to strengthen my knowledge about law well enough to provide free legal services to people who can’t afford it.

Why this example works — strengths and ways to improve

Your statement shows sincere commitment to law and a clear social aim, especially free legal services. However, it relies on broad claims and a one-line turning point rather than examined evidence. The book that changed your view, your debating and your NGO work are promising, but none is explored. Grammar slips and a generic opening also weaken an otherwise earnest voice.

Subject motivation

I picked up a book i.e. 'Landmark Judgements of India,' from my father’s study

This could be a strong origin, but you never name a judgment or explain what transformed your perception. Saying you were so moved that you concluded upon becoming a lawyer asserts motivation without showing the reasoning. One case, and the legal idea it revealed, would make this convincing.

Academic preparation

I have Economics, Political Science, History, and Environmental Science as my core subjects

These subjects are relevant, and you say you chose them with law in mind. You do not show what any of them taught you about rights, institutions or argument. A specific topic, essay or reading connected to law would show readiness for legal study rather than simply listing subjects.

Evidence and reflection

these embedded me with the basic discipline and teamwork, and social skills

This is a generic skill claim. Debating and elocution could show how you build and test arguments, but you do not describe a motion, a rebuttal or a moment of persuasion. Without that, the reader cannot see what you learned or why it matters for law.

Relevant experience

I additionally availed the parents who came for adoption with their licit work

Adoption-related assistance may be your most law-relevant experience, but the phrasing is unclear and the experience is buried in a list. Explaining what the work involved and what it showed you about legal process or access to justice would strengthen your case considerably.

Credibility and voice

My sharp memory has been an asset to me

Self-praise such as sharp memory, empathetic person and ethical and hardworking student is less persuasive than evidence. The UK claim of codified jurisprudence is also historically questionable, since the UK constitution is largely uncodified. Inaccuracies like this undermine credibility in a law application.

Structure and format

Human beings have great potential, but they lack knowledge of the same.

The abstract opening delays your real story. The skills paragraph comes before your evidence, and the final paragraph crowds sports, debating and service into long sentences. Errors such as is English universities need correcting. Grouping law-relevant experiences and reflecting on each would improve the flow.

What you’ve done well

Your goal of providing free legal services to people who can't afford it gives the statement a clear, socially grounded purpose.
Teaching through Manavta Foundation and ration work during COVID show sustained community involvement that could support your interest in rights and access to justice.

How this draft could improve

Name one landmark judgment from the book and explain what it changed in your understanding of law.
Replace self-descriptions and skill lists with one or two examined experiences, such as a debate or the adoption work, showing what you did and learned.
Correct factual and grammatical errors, especially the claim about codified jurisprudence, and cut the generic opening so your motivation appears sooner.

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